写好一篇作文的注意事项
- 2007-01-27 08:37:12
- zhanghongbiao
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1.适当用被动代替主动,这样能更客观的反映事实, 句子开头不要总是用we / I (比如写结尾时不用we should pay attention to而用Attention should be paid to. )举个经典结尾2004年六月六级作文的最后一段:It is ,therefore, high time that some applicable approaches were implemented by the service industry like that. Thus, its competitive edge will be sharpened effectively.
2.善于使用插入语,比如说把副词、连接词等,作插入语放在中间,一般放在主语、动词或者助动词后,两边分别加上逗号。
如however / therefore /for example/I believe 做插入语放在中间,一般放在动词,助动词后,两边分别加上逗号。
比如说: Other individuals, however, take the attitude that …
3. 一定要学会换词,换形象,具体的代替太宽泛的。(考试中一般不要出现good, bad , many, thing, think,
people, opinion 等等)比如上面例子中,applicable代替proper, approaches代替ways, implement代替carry out, sharpen one’s competitive edge代替enhance one’s competitiveness(提高某物竞争力)
下面举一篇我南京六级班上一位同学写的优秀作文(14分)的例子,看看他是如何运用各类写作技巧的。这位同学把老师上课讲的各类写作手法和精彩替换和句型都用上了,作文有了很大的提高。
Computer and I By Simmy
I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that i indulged myself in googling an army of useful information i had expected ,and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me.
exceedingly 替换 very
thrilling 替换 exciting
sth. exert a tremendous fascination on sb 替换 sb. be interested in sth.
google 替换 search
an army of 替换 a lot of
The dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers. Coincident with the advancement of science and technology, computers pouring into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. It is no exaggeration to say we have been submerged by them, in large measure!
The dawn of the new century witnessed 是一个精彩句型,用来描述在某个时期发生了什么事情;
Increasing popularity 替换 more and more popular
Coincident with … 非常地道的词汇,表达“与…一致”的意思,替换 With …
Advancement 替换 development
Pour into ( flood into / swarm into )替换 enter into
Current ( currently )替换 now
Appeal to sb. 替换 sb. be interested in sth.
Growing individuals 替换 more and more people
It is no exaggeration to say 经典句型, 说某事是毫不夸张的
For a start, we can, freely, search desired information at any moment . Little by little, our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. Additionally, we can get huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or delivering email.
For a start 替换 To begin with
We can, freely, search 用了插入语的写作手法
our knowledge will be well enriched, and our horizons will be greatly broadened. 用了非常精彩的被动
Additionally 替换 In addition / Besides
Deliver 替换 send
There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, in a way, especially the growing violence ,***, porn pictures, AV-films emerging on the screen , which leads quiet a few net citizens to copying.
There is no denying that , however, computers can function in the disservice of human beings, 这个句子有三个精彩之处,首先There is no denying that这个句型,还有however作为插入语, function in the disservice of 替换 do harm to
Emerging 代替 appearing ( fading 代替 disappearing )
Net citizen 网民,属于精彩用词
As a classic proverb goes that no garden has no weeds. Computers do play a positive role in the development of people' lives, despite a slice of unfavorable impacts. We should ,therefore, take advantage of the fruits and avoid the opposite facet.
No garden has no weeds 替换 Every coin has two sides
Computers do play ,do 强调
Positive 替换 important / good 等
A slice of 替换 a part of
Unfavorable 替换 bad
Impacts 替换 effects / influences
We should, therefore, take advantage of … 使用插入语
Fruits (而且fruits 用的非常形象, merits/ virtues) 替换 advantage ( defects 替换 disadvantage )
Facet 替换 aspect
各位同学,上面的作文里有这么多精彩的闪光点,作文怎么会不得高分呢!
以下是30个最经典的替换词,各位同学可以参考一下。 (登录即可观看,欢迎游客免费注册。)
1.individuals,characters, folks代替(people ,persons)
2: positive, favorable, rosy(美好的),promising
(有希望的),perfect, pleasurable , excellent, outstanding代替good
3:dreadful, unfavorable, poor, adverse(有害的)代替bad
如果bad做表语,可以有be less impressive代替
eg.An army of college students indulge themselves in playing games, enjoying romance with girls/boys or killing time passively in their dorms. When it approaches to graduation ,as a result, they find their academic records are less impressive.
4.(an army of, an ocean of, a sea of, a multitude of ,many,if not most)代替many.
注:用many, if not most 一定要小心,many后一定要有词。
Eg. Many individuals, if not most, harbor the idea that….同理 用most, if not all ,代替most.
5: a slice of, quiet a few , several代替some
6:harbor the idea that, take the attitude that,
hold the view that, it is widely shared that,
it is universally acknowledged that)替think
(因为是书面语,所以要加that)
7:affair ,business ,matter 代替thing
8: shared 代 common
9.reap huge fruits 代替get much benefit )
10:for my part ,from my own perspective 代替 in my opinion
11:Increasing(ly),growing 代替more and more( 注意没有growingly这种形式。所以当修饰名词时用increasing/growing.修饰形容词,副词用increasingly.
Eg.sth has gained growing popularity.
Sth is increasingly popular with the advancement of sth.
12.little if anything, 或little or nothing代替hardly
13..benefitial rewarding代替helpful be beneficial of
14.shopper,client,consumer,purchaser, 代替customer
15.exceedingly,extremely 代替very
16.hardly unnecessary, hardly inevitable ... 代替 necessary,
inevitable
17.sth appeals to sb, sth exerts a tremendous fascination on sb 代替sb take interest in
18.capture one's attention代替attract one's attention.
19.facet,demension,sphere代aspect
20.be indicative of ,be suggesteive of ,be fearful of代 indicate, suggest ,fear
21.give rise to, lead to, result in, trigger 代替cause.
22. There are several reasons behind sth 代替..reasons for sth
23.desire 代替want.
24.pour attention into 代替pay attention to
25.bear in mind that 代替remember
26. enjoy, possess 代替have(注意process是过程的意思)
27. interaction代替communication
28.frown on sth代替 be against , disagree with sth
29.to name only a few, as an example代替 for example
30. next to/virtually impossible,代替nearly impossible
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2007-03-24 13:54:06
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